Ours Poetica

it is almost 2am and I am SCREAMING this is so fucking good. everything about this fits so we'll and slam poet tommy was something I never knew I needed but oh boy. this is giving me life. and holy shit your writing is beautiful. I am way too tired to make any coherent thoughts but as someone who literally took ap lang and is a writing student, this is a gift from heaven. absolute new favorite fic I hope your day is amazinh

I'm mad with Phil. Tommy's getting high B's and A's in honors classes no less, with one high C and he wants him to try harder. What the hell?? (Also, this is a good thing, me getting mad at the way you wrote the characters. Means I love whats being written. Sorry if that came off weird.)

The descriptions in this?? Bloody gorgeous, I can't wait to read on.

Yooooo this is so good!! One: I really like your writing style, it flows so nicely and really helps capture the mood of the moment :D Two: I Cannot express how excited I was when I read the premise of the story, because there's something so right about poet tommy and I'm a bit of a poetry enthusiast myself, so this fic is just *chefs kiss*

HELP I LOVE THIS AAAAAAA OMFGGG I LOVE POETRY SO THIS- THIS SACJNSJNKSCNSC also fuck wilbur at the begining he sucks ass i see wher hes coming from but stikll >:( /lh

aaawwww this was so cool!! tommy findign a hobby n friends n just. living life! good for him!!!! tell him im proud :')

these r literally my greatest fears, and we r only in chap 1

oh i love this already im so excited your writing is just through the roof its so amazing

THIS IS SO NICE I'm already in love with it. I'm a total English nerd and can really relate to feeling lost socially n such.The alienation in his family :( ouch :( Phiiiiillllllllll you gotta take SOME interest in your son's life. he's literally the only one physically here wtf bro!Can't wait to vicariously feel alive. It's making me remember a really good book I read in high school, "every last word" by Tamara Stone. Super super good.

This has inspired me to start writing again. I had a really bad drought where I just.. couldnt write anything for the life of me, and reading this, the block is just..gone. Your writing style is beautiful, and it evokes so many emotions sometimes I have to take a second to breathe becuase its just so much. To make a character talented and skilled, the writer has to be, and you are absolutely that. Thank you for taking the time and effort to write this, it is incredible.

I fucking love this

Dude im reading this for a second time, its just so good I can't help but to keep thinking about it the rest of the dayAre these sentences cohorent? Probs not, but I think its late

THE ROLLERCOASTER THAT WAS THIS SINGLE CHAPTER. You write emotion so well, I could just FEEL the aloneness and stress radiating off of Tommy, and then he met tubbo and it felt like something was lifted off my shoulders that I hadn't even realized was there. I'm guessing u like poetry, u wouldn't be writing a fic about it if u didn't, but ur fic rlly does have that poetic feel, tho less like a saga type of poetic and more like a twisted emotional type of poetic. I explained that badly lol. Anyways, can't wait to read what happens next!

Fuck yeah he did! This is so cool, I can totally see Tommy doing slam poetry

I’ve never heard of this but just this chapter has me wishing that we had poetry clubs at my school ngl

ive never been so proud of a fictional (does this count as fictional??? its a character based on a character based on a person) character

Your fic has me literally shaking. It’s so well written and you capture the mood and the characters feelings perfectly. This is one of the best fics I have read. Great work :D!

god i cant wait to read more of this. i literally read the first chapter in half an hour, this is absolutely BEAUTIFUL dude!

OMG!!!!!!! POETRY SLAM AU!!!!!!!!!!! YESSSSSSSS!!!!!! (i suggest listening to Blythe Baird's poem "Pocket Sized Feminism"). But, as a literature nerd, though not poetry specifically (I can't seem to write poetry myself), this is going to become one of my favorite fics. I can just tell. So, thank you for writing this and I love your style!

Okay so I’ve seen like a million recommendations for this recently, so I finally decided to check it out- and holy shit, dude.As a person who uses writing, particularly poetry as a funnel for my worst feelings, and is also big into competitive speech, I have a pretty strong feeling that this is going to hit very, very close to home. Your writing is positively brilliant- the overall theme of poetry and how it can be so incredibly meaningful to and representative of a person is already so powerful. There’s something about Tommy’s character and story that is already so raw and human- I’m in love.I know this is also gonna hurt on some level, but that’s okay. The best type of stories are the ones that remind you that you’re human anyways. Simply cannot wait to fall completely, utterly in love with this one.

i cried 4 times10/10

Listen I am SHAKING god this hit me so hard the advanced literature kid who hates maths and sciences (yet he still took honors bio which I actually did too-) and he tries SO HARD and it just doesn’t fucking WORK-“Even as stayed up until 2am every night pouring over course materials and study guides, even as he watched video after video on Khan Academy, he couldn’t pass the countless tests that came his way. Teachers would hand back quizzes with a sour face and a ‘meet me after class’ scribbled in the margins of an in-class FRQ; the tutor he was assigned to quick gave up, complaining he was too hard to teach. They told him he needed to get his grades up or he would have to repeat the year, and Tommy wanted to scream. He was trying, he was, but it didn’t seem like it mattered.”This but is just PH MY GOD I KNOW THAT FEELING AHHHHHH

I have to say that I'm 100% going to re-read this fic at some point because oh my god it was brilliant beyond belief and I love it so much. You've got a new fan and I'm so excited for the next chapter, however long it takes. And this comment might be jumbled but it's all of my thoughts from reading the fic.Firstly, I want to to say that this writing is beautiful, everything has it's place and the words make so much sense. When I say this fic made me nearly cry, I'm being literal and its not often a fic manages to make me cry.The first chapter obviously has it's exposition, showing off the world and everything that's happened to Tommy thus far. Tommy laments about his current position, how things have changed and how much that hurts. Beyond belief and my fucking GOD does it hit so god damn hard. Within the first few scenes you establish Tommy's love for his brothers and his family's less then well hidden contempt, especially Wilbur. Tommy just wanted to play his game, block out the fighting and Wilbur shatters that safety completely. To say Wilbur is entirely selfish in this moment is true, he's hurting and as a teenager only knows how to hurt others to make them see it. Having been that way myself, I feel more than a little sympathy for both Wilbur and Tommy here. And as we go on, Tommy's care turns to contempt as well as his brothers and father leave him in the dust for their own endeavors. Neglect is a funny thing, it may not always be intentional but it still happens and when it does it hurts like you're being bitten by ten million fire ants. It's clear, that even from Tommy's biased perspective, his family does not care in the slightest what they're doing to Tommy. They don't seem to care or even think of the boy that is now feeding himself, doing his own chores and everything a dad or older brother should be helping with. Phil doesn't talk to him and the brothers don't call. Tommy is completely alone.Until Tubbo atleast. These two have a beautiful friendship even with how little has been shown so far. They take care of each other and their benefits are mutual. It's not just because they can help each other but because they genuinely love and care for each other. Tubbo- and eventually Ranboo- is the rock that keeps Tommy grounded in place. Safe in the fact that he's doing BETTER, he's improving his grades and having fun! But Phil shatters that and in the process Tommy. Having a parent tell you "do better" when you're so proud of even passing a class is an awful feeling. Soul crushing and disappointing, leading to more problems with himself and driving Tommy even further away from the family.Now we're introduced to Mr. Sam along with the slam team, who introduce Tommy to something that will make him happy. That shows him he can express his feelings and there are people backing him despite the odds against him. Tommy doesn't think he can do it but he tries, his stubborness pushes him to keep trying and get better with it. He doesn't need to worry about his dad finding out or worrying about where he's gone.And then the brothers decide to come back. And Tommy's world is once again shattered in front of him. What do you do when your estranged brothers come back to your house and think they have a place in your life? When one is a little piss baby who you still for some reason care about but makes your life hell? Well, Tommy listens to his friend. Tubbo is smart, he wanted to make sure Tommy has a chance and to be happy. Wilbur and Techno, as distant as they are now, want to be apart of Tommy's life! That's beyond fantastic even if Tommy doesn't really... Want that? He was content before, he has Tubbo and Ranboo, he has Mr. Sam, he has the Slam Team. He doesn't NEED Wilbur or Techno in his life, he doesn't need Phil. They've only caused him pain.But that brings me onto Wilbur and Techno. Their charactizations are lovely and so, SO well written and while I can tolerate Techno who seems to have an ounce of understanding to the fact that his baby brother isn't his baby brother anymore, Wilbur does not. I HATE Wilbur in this fic, genuinely. Earlier I said I have sympathy for him and I do to some extent but after the most recent chapters, I've found myself loathing him. It's his fault that Tommy's distant, as well as Phil and Techno's. He had no support system from his family, they don't have the right to be his brothers or father anymore. They lost it as soon as they started blaming him for things that he had no control over, or over other people's actions. I understand the resentment of having a younger sibling you need to care for, I did so once in the past but that doesn't justify anything at all. It doesn't justify hating someone who had no fault in your problems but that's what Wilbur does anyhow. And he rips Tommy into shreds, again and again. Trying to get him to break, whether intentionally or not and ignoring the boy's trauma. Wilbur recognizes this as his fault and feels guilt later over what happened.

yeah im gonna cry over this one

Is it bad to say I cried- like it feels like your wrote this story about me- the WGOLE beginning was just my life 😃🔫 I’m still waiting for some like tubbo to come and make me happy 🙄😔But in all seriousness, this is incredible the way you write is truly amazing and as you can see can DEFINITELY make people feel emotional, keep writing your going some place big. ALLLLLL the kudos for this story<3

Screaming rn.THIS IS SO GOOD! AGGHHHH

THE BIT ABOUT TOMMY SHOWING HIS GRADE TO PHIL KILLED ME OMHG THIS IS SO GOOD

This sent me a onto a roller coaster of emotions, with loops and drops and parts that went so fast it felt like the skin would part from my skull, and that was just the first chapter. I can’t wait to see what happens on the next ride.

Oooooh damn this is good. My friend recommended it to me and wow this is good.

You mentioned that Tubbo was in Science Olympiad and I’m about to tell you exactly what events he does and did, assuming that this takes place in scioly 2021-2022 this year he does: remote sensing, chem lab, wifi lab, and also every build event ever, he likes bridge because he enjoys seeing how it explodes and working to see how to make it sturdier, also he obviously does code busters and ppp. (I’m not a nerd, you’re a nerd) Also he used to do Game On. I’m gonna go finish this chapter now.

Yo literally i hate it when you try your best and people say, “let’s try harder 🙂” LIKE MF I DID. That’s part almost had me in TEARS BRUH

FUCK ENVIRONMENTAL SCIENCE!!! WHY IS MY APUSH CLASS EASIER

I am hanging on to every single word this is so good

very great writing :) you write really eloquent and feel like every words and sentences were written with rightful purpose like a damn good book :)

can i just say that phil's words about trying harder next time hurt me both mentally AND physically.the pain of someone not only being indifferent about something you care about and are even increadibly proud of, but also telling you to try harder (basically meaning they think its not good enough. never has and apparently never will be). that pain is indescibable and i think you showed us readers exactly whats going on in tommy's family life. i dont think anyone didnt get the memo.i think b4 it would have been easy to defend will, techno and phil by saying sth along the lines of "well put yourself in their shoes bla bla bla" but tommy was so happy and proud and he /should/ be and phil took that all away with that. -also the writing is SO GOOD. i love the way you phrase the sentences and idk it just feels poetic. (rip me bc i'd love to keep reading but i have a math exam tomorrow and i havent started studying,, its 8pm oop)

I genuinely cried at the first part I'm the overlooked youngest and it hit hard. I don't cry much but its shit like that.

I LOVE THISSSS AAAAI love poetry even if I dont read it a lot and this is just THE AWESOMESTAnd fucking Phil, mannnn

HELL YEAH TOMMY GO YOUSO GLAD I STARTED READING THIS FIC

It is 2 am... I am crying. I love this so much it's si good

I instinctually left kudos, didn’t even think about it before doing it, because this first chapter is so good.

I decided to read this cause I heard how shitty tom's family is in this fic and lately mine has been too but god damn, the point where philza says "let's try to do better next year" after tommy busted his ass hit way too much way too close go home, that HURT.The part where sam says that it's ok if you don't know how to do something and that you just need to try hit close too, so many things in the past I should just have jumped in and so many now, made me remember that I want to try to join a drama course even if I have never done theater before.Also holy god and all of the saints, the writing in this is gorgeous, I already know this will be in my S tier for fanfics. I love the passion in this and there's just something in your word choices and how you phrase things that just makes reading this extremely enjoyable

This entire fanfic is poetry

HOLY SHIT THIS IS SO GOOD

aw HELL i'm in love with this already. the personification of wilbur and techno, tommy's pain at being left behind (not to mention his pain at wilbur's outburst) and how my (and his) hopes went up at Sam and oh my goodness this is out of order but i BROKE when phil disregarded tommy's grades and hard work. i feel that personally and i hurt for him. so much. this was a rollercoaster and i loved every minute of it.

Ahhhh I love it I love it I love it Wow Poetry is such a amazing thing and the way you line your writing is just so impressive. Especially the details. And I love angst Stories Heheh

I am so so glad that I found that one fanart of this au on insta and decided to be here holy shit

wow this is so cool author! the struggles tommy went through and being torn between loving your family, wanting them to love as fiercely back and trying to be rational to their acts of distancing away from you is painful and very relatable too the insights in a classics obsessed is also very cool /pos thanks for the chapter <3 i love the way you write!!! :D

Oh my goodness this is so beautiful I love it but I’m gonna cry this was so good

holy shit your descriptions are absolutely beautiful!! i loved the ones about Puffy and Tommy's response poem <33